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Ep34 shichimi lol refactor

David Revoy requested to merge ep34-shichimi-lol-refactor into master

After a IRC discussion (copied under) here is a refactor too disambiguate Shichimi acting after the arrival of Pepper. She was smiling; now she share a laught with Coriander. Her happy/surprised expression at the bottom of page 2 is enough to show she is happy Pepper arrived.

For this change, I'll have to tweak SVG, regenerated transcript and upload an PNG artwork (it will be in B&W, crushed with optipng max. Estimated size: 300Kb).

IRC log (today) for ref:

[16:55] <cmaloney> https://www.peppercarrot.com/0_sources/new-ep34_The-Knighting-of-Shichimi/low-res/en_Pepper-and-Carrot_by-David-Revoy_E34P03.jpg
[16:55] <cmaloney> Shichimi's facial expression here doesn't track near the middle
[16:55] <cmaloney> because Pepper gets cut off by Wasabi
[16:56] <cmaloney> Shichimi looks like she's in a trance
[16:56] <cmaloney> or about to fire laser-eyebeams at Pepper or something...
[16:56] <cmaloney> Wondering if it should be moved to the top of the page.
[16:57] <cmaloney> she's smiling, and then she gets startled, and then she's called on by Wasabi
[16:58] <cmaloney> Every time I read it (in color) it feels awkward.
[17:15] <deevad> cmaloney: Thank you for the feedback. It's a complex fix, but possible (1h/2h task now everything is multilayered and split on SVGs).
[17:15] <deevad> Maybe her facial expression doesn't communicate well what I had in mind
[17:16] <deevad> Wasabi is not really supposed to cut Pepper
[17:16] <deevad> This panel was a happy Shichimi, just happy now her three friends are lined at front row
[17:16] <deevad> it's a "too early happy end"
[17:17] <deevad> before the panel after; where everything change for the balance
[17:18] <deevad> So maybe I should more investigate on her facial expression, I think the placement of the panel is ok
[17:19] <deevad> unfrown her brows and make it more happy
[17:20] <deevad> cmaloney: maybe I should show her hand in front of her mouth; blushing and also laughting a bit?  (hi hi!)
[17:20] <deevad> following Coriander
[17:24] <deevad> cmaloney: https://www.peppercarrot.com/extras/temp/2021-03-16_screenshot_172404_net.jpg <-- possible fix
[17:25] <deevad> maybe more Shichimi-ish type of reaction
[17:27] <deevad> maybe even the "hi!hi!" new speechbubble addition is unecessary here
[17:27] <deevad> (haha/ehee laught)
[18:03] <cmaloney> deevad: That works
[18:04] <cmaloney> deevad: (something like *snicker*) or (hee hee) works for the speech bubble
[18:04] <cmaloney> That's a lot better
[18:05] <cmaloney> it shows friendship, laughter, and gives contrast to what she's about to feel
[18:05] <cmaloney> Thank you.
[18:08] <deevad> cmaloney:  thank you for the idea of improvement ;)  So,  "hee hee." or "hee hee!" ?   
[18:08] <deevad> maybe first one, it's a shy laught
[18:11] <cmaloney> hee hee!
[18:11] <cmaloney> or tee hee
[18:11] <cmaloney> tee hee is a cuter version
[18:12] <deevad> without punctuation?  ok :)
[18:18] <cmaloney> yeah, punctuation is just going to be a distraction
[18:19] <deevad> ok, I see. With a punctuation it could sound like a statement
[18:19] <cmaloney> right

Ref: #176 (closed)

Edited by David Revoy

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