[ja epsode 27] proofreading
I read the Japanese translation and have doubts on some wordings. Of course I'm not Japanese native, but some must be founded.
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P04, 「試してるつもり?」
I'm confused: taken in the usual natural way, it means "are you trying to test me?"
I expected 「試すつもり」 at the very least, but 「試してみない?」 or 「試してみる?」 sounds best to me. -
P04 「これまで嘘なんかついたことないのに」
Does 「一生 嘘なんかついたことないのに」 work too? If it does, maybe it would make the comedy aspect more present.
Note for non Japanese speakers: respectively "I have never lied until now/to this day(?)" and "I have never lied in my whole life" -
P05, 「このバグを修正しなきゃ」
that approximately translates to "gotta fix this bug", and there's nothing about permanently.
how about 「そのバグを修正してやる!」? to get closer to "I'll fix your bug!" (angry tone with やる) -
I have noticed that overall, the translation keeps a minimum politeness (non-conflict) level.
How about some more informal stuff in places?
Especially for Pepper. I have a hard time imagining chaos witches being very tactful all the time. For example: P04: 「ええ いらないかも」 → 「まあ いらないんだ」 (maybe not a good example, but it's the idea) -
Conversely, I'm not sure I find the tailor polite enough when he should be. 「動きまわるのをやめていだだけますかな」 → how about removing the な?
He must remain formal when speaking to her Majesty, even if irritated! -
P06, 「アンサツ ヲ ケイカク シテ シマスカ」
Shouldn't this be 「アンサツ ヲ ケイカク シテ イマスカ」? (typo イ/シ)
Katakana for the robot is so cool, by the way. It reminds me of famicom!
@gurugurusp 感想は?