webcomics issueshttps://framagit.org/peppercarrot/webcomics/-/issues2023-12-27T03:50:14Zhttps://framagit.org/peppercarrot/webcomics/-/issues/254Episode 39: The Bedtime Story2023-12-27T03:50:14ZDavid Revoyinfo@davidrevoy.comEpisode 39: The Bedtime StoryHi @all ! :smile:
## Why am I receiving this?
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## Why am I receiving this?
You received this notification or email because I quoted 'all', and you contributed to Pepper&Carrot in the past. If you don't want to receive emails or notifications about future episodes, that's totally fine: Feel free to turn on/off Notifications (on the right sidebar on Framagit). I quoted 'all' here only as an invitation, but no obligations. Thank you!
## Step 1: Feedback about the Alpha version
I just posted a first version (not finished, b&w, but readable) of ep39 and **I want your feedback after reading it**. It was written in French, but I also made a quick DeepL English translation so everyone here can understand the 'big picture' of this very special episode:
▶️ French version (original): https://www.peppercarrot.com/fr/xyz/index.html
▶️ English version (DeepL translation): https://www.peppercarrot.com/en/xyz/index.html
After reading: please do not spell-fix, translate, start proposing dialogs, etc... That's not the purpose of this step 1 and we can do that later. In this step, I'm interested about:
- Your questions.
- If it was easy to read.
- Your thoughts as a reader.
- Your thoughts about what you imagine other reader will experience.
In step 2, we will work on improving the dialog in French. Then Step 3 a French to English Translation. All these steps will be annunciated here.
## About this episode
*(Read the episode before reading this part, thanks!)*
This is a "heavy backstory" episode. I spent a lot of time writing, doing countless of draft in the hope I'll find an entertaining way to reveal the backstory while keeping the formula of a Pepper&Carrot episode (page count, humor, a start and an ending). What a challenge! This is the best I could come with.
It came at the cost of importants changes in the wiki. Sorry about that if you were familiar with its content, but I had to simplify a bit the amount of plot we had. What really changed and why is detailed on a issue here: https://framagit.org/peppercarrot/wiki/-/issues/3
## Release date
**No hurry**
It's an episode with a lot of text, a lot of backstory and I'm working on it since 6 months. It's not an episode possible for me to finish and colorize before the end of the year anyway (The amount of complex panel is ridiculous on this episode). So we have time to share feedback here during end of year holidays and in January.
I'm optimistic for a release at the end of January.
This episode was written at first for Halloween, that's why it is also a bit dark for the Xmas season. Sorry about that! A reason more to delay it to January I guess.https://framagit.org/peppercarrot/webcomics/-/issues/238Episode 38: The Healer2023-08-22T21:17:41ZDavid Revoyinfo@davidrevoy.comEpisode 38: The HealerHi @all !
Finally, a new thread to proofread a future Pepper&Carrot episode!
## Why am I receiving this?
You received this notification or email because I quoted 'all', and you contributed to Pepper&Carrot in the past. If you don't w...Hi @all !
Finally, a new thread to proofread a future Pepper&Carrot episode!
## Why am I receiving this?
You received this notification or email because I quoted 'all', and you contributed to Pepper&Carrot in the past. If you don't want to receive emails or notifications about future episodes, that's totally fine: Feel free to turn on/off Notifications (on the right sidebar on Framagit). I quoted 'all' here only as an invitation, but no obligations. Thank you!
## Step 1: Alpha in French
I posted a version (not yet finished, but readable) with French speech bubbles. I'm curious about your feedback after reading it.
Because it's in French and I want to keep everyone on board, here is [ep38_en_autotranslated.txt](/uploads/0a31fbeb895c9f595db90cf49ac0d578/ep38_en_autotranslated.txt): an English txt file (temporary auto-translated).
:fast_forward: **Read it on XYZ (fr):** http://www.peppercarrot.com/fr/xyz/
:notepad_spiral:️ **Dialogs on Framapad (fr):** https://annuel2.framapad.org/p/peppercarrot-ep38beta-fr-a075?lang=fr
First step will be to solidify the French version on the shared Framapad. Then after the French version freeze, we'll move to the English translation, and then all other languages. That's why you shouldn't translate this episode now.
## About
_(I advice to not read this part before reading the episode, thanks!)_
I had too many "open doors" to close on the Pepper&Carrot series: Pepper's quest to find work, her "wanted" poster, her humiliations with spells not working as she wanted... She wasn't really taking decisions in regard to all of that. When at the end of the last episode Pepper got a big supply of 'Phoenix's tears' I thought it was the perfect opportunity for her to attempt a radical change.
This is something I also feel on my social bubble: the desire to leave everything and start anew. So I thought it could be cathartic to show a story where Pepper actually does that, without any compromise. It was also fun to show Pepper resisting Cayenne and underline again how rebellious she is against authority. It was also a secret pleasure to draw Cayenne actually caring for Pepper even though she hides it.
This episode is also about the impostor syndrome, It's about new groups of "friends" welcoming you based on interest, and it's about family always reminding you of your roots. It's also announcing the way back home for Pepper after many episodes 'in the wild'. I personally really needed to hear this final _"Welcome back"_ from Cayenne at the end.https://framagit.org/peppercarrot/webcomics/-/issues/213Episode 37: The Tears of the Phoenix [beta, ready for translation]2022-11-30T16:21:59ZDavid Revoyinfo@davidrevoy.comEpisode 37: The Tears of the Phoenix [beta, ready for translation]Bonjour à tous,
*(If you can read only English and received this message, see the 'Notes' at the end of this message)*
Après un assez long hiatus me revoici avec un nouvel épisode sur le feu. Celui là à connu toute sortes d'obstacle ...Bonjour à tous,
*(If you can read only English and received this message, see the 'Notes' at the end of this message)*
Après un assez long hiatus me revoici avec un nouvel épisode sur le feu. Celui là à connu toute sortes d'obstacle (réecriture, changement de style en cours de route, problème de matos, Covid...) et je suis content d'arriver aujourd'hui à en sortir une version lisible.
Ceci dit, rien d'exceptionel comme pour le dernier épisode, celui ci est un épisode classique. Il fait 8 pages et intègre une introduction pour ouvrir le livre 5. L'histoire est motivé pour être "un garde fou" scénaristique pour contrer l'effet surpuissant du Réa de dragon de l'épisode précédent. Arra le dragon prevenait Pepper d'un tabou, que ça ne se fait pas de passer du Réa de Dragon à une sorcière, on découvre ici un peu les conséquences. Ceci devrait la dissuader de demander du Réa de Dragon à nouveau ou de faire une armée de sorcière plus dragons. Le prix a payé est fort: plus de magie après, et une maladie qui tue et demande un artefact rare (les larmes de Phoénix).
Les dessins sont toujours en cours d'encrage; certains décors sont même encore crayonné (page 1,2 et 3), il y a encore du boulot de ce côté ci!
## Beta-Lecture:
⏩ **Lecture sur XYZ:** http://www.peppercarrot.com/fr/xyz/
Comme d'hab, je suis intéressé en premier de savoir comment c'est passé votre première lecture. Blocages? Obligé de revenir en arrière? décrochages? Les passages drôle? pas drôle du tout? Merci de commenter ici ce que vous en avez ressenti.
🗒️ **Amélioration dialogues, le Framapad collaboratif:** https://annuel2.framapad.org/p/ep37-alpha-fr?lang=fr
Si vous avez des idées pour améliorer ou fluidifier des passages, des bulles : je suis preneur aussi. Si vous avez une (ou plusieurs) propositions, entrez là en dessous des lignes concernées comme sur [cette copie d'écran](https://framagit.org/peppercarrot/webcomics/uploads/2755c4cf3a4dbc135678241f042e16ac/2021-11-09_screenshot_135241_net.jpg), on aura tous une couleur différentes. Je ferai mon marché dedans 🛒😃. (en Français pour le moment, inutile de traduire en Anglais, ont attendra la version Française finale pour ça.)
📅 **Calendrier idéal:**
* **19 Mai:** Publication de la version alpha
* **30 Mai:** Version Française finale
* **08 Juin:** Version Anglaise finale et appel aux autres traductions
* **15 Juin:** Publication
Merci d'avance pour votre coup de main sur ce nouveau chapitre. :thumbsup:
#### Invitations:
J'invite ici tout celles et ceux qui veulent aider! Mais particulièrement l'équipe FR des traductions passé, j'invoque: @Nartance , @valvin , @Quetzal2 , @zeograd , @bbbhltz , @fredericmora , @paa20a , @estefania , @roamingzjw , @bsl .
**Notes:** I also invited the beta-reader team reading English (and sometime also French): @craigmaloney , @gunchleoc , @ArloJamesBarnes, @parnikkapore , @Alkarex , @Tirifto , @gunchleoc , @huftis so you can get a rought idea of what the new episode is about with an auto translator ( raw transcript: https://www.peppercarrot.com/0_sources/new-ep37_Phoenix-Tears/lang/fr/ep37_fr_transcript.md ).
**Feel free to comment here in French or English** (just pick the one you prefer), same in the Framapad. Also feel free to turn on/off Notifications (on the right sidebar on Framagit) and manage freely if you participate or not. I quote names here only for invitation, no obligations. Thank you!David Revoyinfo@davidrevoy.comDavid Revoyinfo@davidrevoy.com2022-08-03https://framagit.org/peppercarrot/webcomics/-/issues/203Episode 36 : The Surprise Attack2022-01-01T14:06:41ZDavid Revoyinfo@davidrevoy.comEpisode 36 : The Surprise AttackBonjour à tous,
*(If you can read only English and received this message, see the 'Notes' at the end of this message)*
Je suis content de pouvoir partager enfin l'alpha du long épisode 36 (version française), je travaille dessus depui...Bonjour à tous,
*(If you can read only English and received this message, see the 'Notes' at the end of this message)*
Je suis content de pouvoir partager enfin l'alpha du long épisode 36 (version française), je travaille dessus depuis Août.
C'est le plus long épisode de Pepper&Carrot, il fait le double de la normale. C'est aussi le premier conçu pour un thème d'affichage sombre. Un vrai défi technique conçu pour compléter et conclure le quatrième livre (Auto-édité en Anglais, et chez Glénat en Français). Les dessins sont encore très "work in progress". Les trois prochaines semaines seront dédiés donc à la finalisation. Tout ça devrait apparaitre sur XYZ (lien dessous) jour après jour.
Cet épisode fait référence à de nombreux épisodes passés. Surtout depuis l'épisode 32, "[Le Champs de Bataille](https://www.peppercarrot.com/fr/webcomic/ep32_The-Battlefield.html)". J'imagine que ce nombre de références déroutera des lecteurs et sera sans doute mieux accueilli dans le contexte du livre. Peut-être encouragera t'il à relire les épisodes passés? En tout cas, il contient un paquet de nouveaux éléments, et j'avoue, je me suis fait franchement plaisir à l'écrire ! J'éspère que ça se ressentira.
## Workflow:
⏩ **L'épisode est à lire ici sur XYZ:** https://www.peppercarrot.com/fr/xyz/
Je suis intéressé en premier de savoir comment c'est passé votre première lecture.
Merci de commenter ici ce que vous en avez ressenti : là ou ça coince, là où ça le fait, etc...
Si vous avez des idées pour améliorer ou fluidifier des passages, des bulles : je suis preneur aussi. Je ferai mon marché dedans 🛒😃.
🗒️ **Le Framapad collaboratif:** https://annuel2.framapad.org/p/ep36-alpha-fr?lang=fr
Tous les dialogues de l'alpha sont dans le lien ci-dessus. Si vous avez une (ou plusieurs) propositions, entrez là en dessous des lignes concernées comme sur [cette copie d'écran](https://framagit.org/peppercarrot/webcomics/uploads/2755c4cf3a4dbc135678241f042e16ac/2021-11-09_screenshot_135241_net.jpg), on aura tous une couleur différentes. (en Français pour le moment, inutile de traduire en Anglais, il y aura un sujet pour ça une fois que la version Française sera finale.)
📅 **Calendrier idéal:**
* **20 Nov:** Publication de la version alpha
* **28 Nov:** Version Française finale
* **05 Dec:** Version Anglaise finale et appel aux autres traductions
* **11 Dec:** Publication
Merci d'avance pour votre coup de main dans cette nouvel aventure. :thumbsup:
#### Invitations:
J'invite ici tout celles et ceux qui veulent aider! Mais particulièrement l'équipe FR des traductions passé: @Nartance , @valvin , @Quetzal2 , @zeograd et les nouveaux traducteurs Français → Anglais : @bbbhltz , @fredericmora , @paa20a , @estefania , @roamingzjw , @bsl .
**Notes:** I also invited the beta-reader team of our previous workflow in English. @craigmaloney , @martindisch , @ArloJamesBarnes, @parnikkapore , @Alkarex , @Tirifto , @gunchleoc , @huftis . I wanted to find a way to keep you in the loop! Sorry for this thread and XYZ in French; I explain why [in a blog-post here](https://www.davidrevoy.com/article878/looking-for-french-to-english-translators-contributors), you probably saw it. I made with an auto-translator online [a quick English text file](https://www.peppercarrot.com/extras/temp/2021-11-20_ep36_en_alpha_DeepL_000_txt) so you can get a rought idea of what the new episode is about, but mind this is not accurate and this text doesn't need a better translation for now.
Feel free to comment here in French or English (just pick the one you prefer), same in the Framapad. Also feel free to turn on/off Notifications (on the right sidebar on Framagit) and manage freely if you participate or not. I quote names here only for invitation, no obligations.https://framagit.org/peppercarrot/webcomics/-/issues/187Episode 35: The Reflection2021-06-25T07:52:00ZDavid Revoyinfo@davidrevoy.comEpisode 35: The Reflection![2021-05-18_screenshot_181751_net](/uploads/964cbc2b0ba3adbf4a72fa9854588390/2021-05-18_screenshot_181751_net.jpg)
Hey, here is the new episode 35 ready for beta-reading!
## Workflow I propose:
1. Read a fresh work-in-progress rende...![2021-05-18_screenshot_181751_net](/uploads/964cbc2b0ba3adbf4a72fa9854588390/2021-05-18_screenshot_181751_net.jpg)
Hey, here is the new episode 35 ready for beta-reading!
## Workflow I propose:
1. Read a fresh work-in-progress rendering [on XYZ](https://www.peppercarrot.com/static6/sources&page=XYZ)
1. Comment the lines [on the merge-Request 746](https://framagit.org/peppercarrot/webcomics/-/merge_requests/746/diffs?commit_id=6962fd30e27e8a8f85aee75b7648113de8edd4c7) to enhance or fix speechbubbles. Update 2021-05-26: New version for alpha2 here: https://framagit.org/peppercarrot/webcomics/-/merge_requests/746/diffs?commit_id=a84b7289c36639b7c014f987ea5cf78d69c118ca
1. Report any other questions/suggestions/feedback here on this thread
I hope you'll like this new episode!
## Dialogues and difficulties:
(note: Please read the paragraph under after getting a first read of the preview on [XYZ](https://www.peppercarrot.com/static6/sources&page=XYZ), so you can build a first impression of the episode before being influenced with my explanation of "what I tried to-do", thank you.)
So, in this episode, Pepper starts tired and Rea exhausted. But she is still chased by a Pilot (Torreya) and Dragon (Arra) of Ah. This situation puts her into a big stress. Pepper will invent a plan to get rid of the Dragon, expressing the darkest side of her personality. This confrontation with herself will remind her who she really is, and decide a rather anticlimactic move... The episode has an interesting curve for Pepper, and recenter the story around the "good witch" VS "mean witch" struggle for Pepper growing as a Chaosah witch.
I tried again to make an episode in English from scratch, difficult! Here are limitations I met:
1. Page 2: "Clingies" I tried to find a similar term to the French "pot-de-colles" (glue pot) used when someone keep tracking you.
2. Page 2: "Get a grip" Pepper speak to herself, motivational, not sure if used in English ("Reprends-toi Pepper!").
3. Page 5 "Drat" Not sure if vulgar or too familiar. Not sure what Pepper could use in extreme situation.
4. Page 6 "The Lake of the Horns", inspired by real [Lac Cornu](https://www.savoie-mont-blanc.com/offre/fiche/lac-cornu/150635) on Mont-Blanc mountain in France while writting the scenario. Unfortunately, word to word translation made the "Horny Lake" and it sounded less evil (or more, not sure).
5. Page 6: I struggled a lot to suggest the trap would kill Torreya and Arra without showing it, speaking about impalement or showing blood. I hope it will work as it is during the first read.
6. Page 12: The end "reflection" of Pepper is bit short to my taste. I originally wanted to write here three speechbubbles and get something a bit more substantial about identity and "being true to yourself" wisdom; but I felt limited by my vocabulary. I had: "Whatever the risks and dangers in the future, staying true to who I am is the most important thing in the end, No. It's more than that. It is essential." But that felt a bit off too. I'm open for proposal on this part!
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Ping @craigmaloney , @Nartance , @valvin , @martindisch , @ArloJamesBarnes, @parnikkapore , @Alkarex , @Tirifto , @gunchleoc , @huftis , @Carotte : team preproduction of the previous thread (welcome to any other who want to participate into episode 35 preproduction too).https://framagit.org/peppercarrot/webcomics/-/issues/176Episode 34: The Knighting of Shichimi2021-03-31T19:58:36ZDavid Revoyinfo@davidrevoy.comEpisode 34: The Knighting of Shichimi![2021-02-19_screenshot_114142_net](/uploads/2e57676c569458ef6cf84dd2d09212f9/2021-02-19_screenshot_114142_net.jpg)
Hey! here is the thread for the future making-of episode 34 codenamed now "The Graduation of Shichimi". I refactored the...![2021-02-19_screenshot_114142_net](/uploads/2e57676c569458ef6cf84dd2d09212f9/2021-02-19_screenshot_114142_net.jpg)
Hey! here is the thread for the future making-of episode 34 codenamed now "The Graduation of Shichimi". I refactored the story for many reasons. You'll find them on the video I posted on the blog ([link: ep34 production report video](https://www.davidrevoy.com/article813/production-report-episode-34-wasabi)).
I post today the 'alpha' version:
- Black and white inking is done!
- PNGs, SVGs and JSONs are on Framagit.
- English version is 'alpha' and require work to feel natural and fluid ('alpha' is my homemade translation).
- English version will be the source/original language for this episode. (French will be translated from English after 'beta/ready for translation').
### Workflow I propose:
1. Read a fresh [rendering of episode 34 on XYZ](https://www.peppercarrot.com/static6/sources&page=XYZ)
2. Comment the lines [on the Alpha-3 transcript commit](https://framagit.org/peppercarrot/webcomics/-/commit/8d77e36d8bfe63fd8a8cf5a37d3817d0624195d9) for speechbubble enhancement (it might be easier to discuss colaboratively a speechbubble/text this way)
3. Report any questions/suggestions/feedback here on this thread
I hope you'll like it!
### Versions:
- [WIP with daily update on XYZ page](https://www.peppercarrot.com/static6/sources&page=XYZ)
- [2021-02-20: Alpha-1 comic pages](https://www.peppercarrot.com/XYZ/index.php?subfolder=ep34_alpha1)
- [2021-03-02: Alpha-3 transcript commit](https://framagit.org/peppercarrot/webcomics/-/commit/8d77e36d8bfe63fd8a8cf5a37d3817d0624195d9)
- [2021-02-22: Alpha-2 transcript commit](https://framagit.org/peppercarrot/webcomics/-/commit/8ac3105d6ad26d37b5dcb93e1902c73995ade789)
- [2021-02-20: Alpha-1 transcript commit](https://framagit.org/peppercarrot/webcomics/-/commit/dc5599e6f00f6d54d7a72744c1a6e12293430c68)
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Ping @craigmaloney , @Nartance , @valvin , @martindisch , @ArloJamesBarnes, @parnikkapore, @hyperbolicpain, @Alkarex, @singpolyma , @gunchleoc , @huftis, @Carotte : team preproduction of the previous threads (welcome to any other who want to participate into episode 34 preproduction too). Previous thread about ep34 "The Gate Keeper" will be closed and redirected here.2021-03-31https://framagit.org/peppercarrot/webcomics/-/issues/167Episode 34: The Gatekeeper (scenario/storyboard - V1broken. Rewrite WIP)2021-02-19T10:56:19ZDavid Revoyinfo@davidrevoy.comEpisode 34: The Gatekeeper (scenario/storyboard - V1broken. Rewrite WIP)Hi,
Here is the thread for the future making-of episode 34 codenamed now "The Gatekeeper"
**:warning: Rewriting in progress, V1 doesn't work. Please wait V2 for feedback or to save reading time.**
**→ Mardown raw scenario (V1):** [n...Hi,
Here is the thread for the future making-of episode 34 codenamed now "The Gatekeeper"
**:warning: Rewriting in progress, V1 doesn't work. Please wait V2 for feedback or to save reading time.**
**→ Mardown raw scenario (V1):** [new-ep34_The-Gatekeeper/ep34_script.md](https://framagit.org/peppercarrot/webcomics/-/blob/820b6e790a15acad9b5aa64783f3ebb862d049bb/new-ep34_The-Gatekeeper/ep34_script.md)
**→ Latested version rendered online (V1):** https://www.peppercarrot.com/static6/sources&page=XYZ
I added notes at the end of the scenario to not spoil the story here. Usual Todo stuff: Feedback, compensate my low skill in English, improve dialogs and other enhancements appearing as low-hanging fruits.
**Storyboard (V1)**
![2020-07-07_screenshot_225437_net](/uploads/176f57728312f6518a8b11ff7d8eeac6/2020-07-07_screenshot_225437_net.jpg)
Ping team preproduction of previous episodes if you have time for a feedback: @craigmaloney , @Nartance , @valvin , @martindisch , @ArloJamesBarnes, @parnikkapore, @hyperbolicpain, @Alkarex, @singpolyma , @gunchleoc , @huftis or any other who want to participate into episode 34 preproduction. Thank you for reading!https://framagit.org/peppercarrot/webcomics/-/issues/154Episode 33: Spell of War (Beta: "translation ready")2020-06-29T17:10:52ZDavid Revoyinfo@davidrevoy.comEpisode 33: Spell of War (Beta: "translation ready")Hi,
Here is the second and last part of the battlefield arc ([Episode 32](https://framagit.org/peppercarrot/webcomics/-/issues/147) was the first part). I also wrote its skeleton in January and it was easy to flesh out the mecanic this ...Hi,
Here is the second and last part of the battlefield arc ([Episode 32](https://framagit.org/peppercarrot/webcomics/-/issues/147) was the first part). I also wrote its skeleton in January and it was easy to flesh out the mecanic this week right after the release of episode 32.
**→ File:** https://framagit.org/peppercarrot/webcomics/-/blob/master/new-ep33_Spell-of-War/ep33_script.md
**→ XYZ rendering:** https://www.peppercarrot.com/static6/sources&page=XYZ
Usual Todo stuff: Feedback, compensate my low skill in English, improve dialogs and other enhancements appearing as low-hanging fruits.
**Storyboard**
I'm keeping roughly the 3x3 grid formula for the layout and it expanded to 8 pages this time:
![2020-04-04_screenshot_191522_net](/uploads/2ada0010d262ec85ab36ccf457872af3/2020-04-04_screenshot_191522_net.jpg)
Ping team preproduction: @craigmaloney , @Nartance , @valvin , @martindisch , @ArloJamesBarnes, @parnikkapore, @Alkarex, @singpolyma or any other who want to participate into episode 33 preproduction. Thank you for reading!https://framagit.org/peppercarrot/webcomics/-/issues/147Episode 32: The Battlefield2020-04-04T17:25:46ZDavid Revoyinfo@davidrevoy.comEpisode 32: The BattlefieldHi!
I hope everyone is fine after the first month of 2020, here I finally could produce a full scenario for episode 32, code named "The Battlefield":
→ **File:** https://framagit.org/peppercarrot/webcomics/blob/master/new-ep32_The-Batt...Hi!
I hope everyone is fine after the first month of 2020, here I finally could produce a full scenario for episode 32, code named "The Battlefield":
→ **File:** https://framagit.org/peppercarrot/webcomics/blob/master/new-ep32_The-Battlefield/ep32_battlefield_script.md
→ **Rendering:** https://www.peppercarrot.com/static6/sources&page=XYZ
For the general theme, it's a new arc about Pepper trying to get new a professional career with her new diploma. This episode is about getting the right appearance for a work position and how other evaluate our skill and experience based on our appearance.
For the process, I wanted to simplify the creation of new episodes. That's why I posted a detailed scenario in English. I'm of course still not good enough to write well in English and I don't have good dialog but I want to try it again and ask for your help. Also, solving dialog at the root of the process sounds like the right thing to do. This also feels very adapted to the flexibility of working on text with Git. I adopted a new format to write my comic scenarios, simplified and compatible with markdown:
* A new paragraph is equal a new panel.
* The speech-bubbles are tabbed and names of characters capitalized to ease re-reading only the dialog.
* Three "\- \- \-" indicates a page cut.
**So here is a TODO if you want to contribute:**
* [ ] Read the scenario and post general feedback about the story.
* [ ] Fix English mistakes and rewrite weird sentences.
* [ ] Improves dialog because I could convey the general meaning and ideas for the mechanic of the story to work but not plenty of subtle things as I would do in French including a military tone, a more direct and vulgar way to speak for the uneducated Barbarian King, something opposite for his educated Officer, more life in the words of angry Pepper, authority in the voice of Pepper in disguise...etc...
(PS: Ping @craigmaloney , @Nartance , @valvin , @martindisch , @ArloJamesBarnes and other who want to participate into episode 32 preproduction are welcome)https://framagit.org/peppercarrot/webcomics/-/issues/128Episode 31: The Fight ( Ready for translation )2019-12-21T19:26:37ZDavid Revoyinfo@davidrevoy.comEpisode 31: The Fight ( Ready for translation )![2019-11-25_screenshot_193755_net](/uploads/0de852b6dfbdff9858a6ce12d3378847/2019-11-25_screenshot_193755_net.jpg)
Here we are again after a long pause caused by a complex self-publishing book project (still WIP) and the Redbubble e-sh...![2019-11-25_screenshot_193755_net](/uploads/0de852b6dfbdff9858a6ce12d3378847/2019-11-25_screenshot_193755_net.jpg)
Here we are again after a long pause caused by a complex self-publishing book project (still WIP) and the Redbubble e-shop project.
**You can read a snapshot rendering here:**
https://www.peppercarrot.com/en/static6/sources&page=XYZ
https://www.peppercarrot.com/fr/static6/sources&page=XYZ
**Previous revision (temp):**
2019-12-02: https://www.peppercarrot.com/XYZ/index.php?subfolder=ep31-WIP_betaB
2019-11-25: https://www.peppercarrot.com/XYZ/index.php?subfolder=ep31-WIP_beta
I hope you'll like it! I believe this episode starts a new era in Pepper&Carrot, I tried to inovate with background of panels (dark), a new painting technique (still WIP, grisaille speedpainting here), 4K artworks(3840x5422px), en+fr on same page for proofreading, "3 years later" because my style is evolving and Pepper grew [on my recent artworks here](https://www.davidrevoy.com/article736/speedpainting) or [there](https://www.davidrevoy.com/article743/powerful). What do you think about it?2019-12-18https://framagit.org/peppercarrot/webcomics/-/issues/114Episode 30: Need a Hug (storyboard)2019-09-18T08:04:53ZDavid Revoyinfo@davidrevoy.comEpisode 30: Need a Hug (storyboard)Hi! It has been a while since the previous episode and, I must tell; a very confusing period for me. So confusing I had sincerely no idea if the new website was a rebirth or a coffin for Pepper&Carrot. I kept being trapped in-between thi...Hi! It has been a while since the previous episode and, I must tell; a very confusing period for me. So confusing I had sincerely no idea if the new website was a rebirth or a coffin for Pepper&Carrot. I kept being trapped in-between this up and down during a long time. I was loaded with many doubts and questions but I feel ok now because spending time into freelance comissions was a real cure. I found my answers, friendly members in the community, motivation and confidence into the structure of the project. So, I'm happy to share with you here a humble storyboard I would like to color and detail for episode 30. I'm curious of your feedback about it.
**Notes**
* As for episode 5,10,15,20,25; this is an episode without speechbubbles.
* I wrote notes on the panels to share what the digital pencil couldn't render. This text will disapear.
**TODO**
* [X] Find a title: I couldn't find a good one... "Artificial paradise"?, "The simulation"?... Can you help me? Ping: @craigmaloney , @martindisch , @Nartance , @valvin , @imsesaok if you have ideas about it. --> Found by @imsesaok in first comment: "Need a Hug"
**Read the storyboard here:**
**https://www.peppercarrot.com/XYZ/index.php?subfolder=ep30-WIP_en**
![2019-07-15_screenshot_132729_net](/uploads/f973c9f141af25b434c60c02e00b6385/2019-07-15_screenshot_132729_net.jpg)David Revoyinfo@davidrevoy.comDavid Revoyinfo@davidrevoy.com2019-07-31https://framagit.org/peppercarrot/webcomics/-/issues/94Episode 29: The Underworld Dragon (String freeze, ready for translation)2019-04-29T15:53:48ZDavid Revoyinfo@davidrevoy.comEpisode 29: The Underworld Dragon (String freeze, ready for translation)Hi!
![2019-01-31_screenshot_155046_net](/uploads/951b90675dfc9ae8baed9bae5f8b43b3/2019-01-31_screenshot_155046_net.jpg)
Here is a very early thread for discussing, correcting, enhancing episode 29.
Right now, it is only a markdown sce...Hi!
![2019-01-31_screenshot_155046_net](/uploads/951b90675dfc9ae8baed9bae5f8b43b3/2019-01-31_screenshot_155046_net.jpg)
Here is a very early thread for discussing, correcting, enhancing episode 29.
Right now, it is only a markdown scenario: https://framagit.org/peppercarrot/scenarios/blob/master/episodes/drafts/ep29_The-Underworld-Dragon.md and I'm collecting feedback if you like the idea and structure of the story. Or if it triggers a new idea of something that could be really better. Feel free to share!
**Changelog:**
- 31 January: Markdown of the scenario in English
- 04 March: Storyboard (French) https://www.peppercarrot.com/XYZ/index.php?subfolder=ep29-WIP
- 05 March: Initial split in PNG+SVG and upload on GIT(fr); https://www.peppercarrot.com/XYZ/index.php?subfolder=ep29-WIP-c
- 19 April: String freeze, ready for translationhttps://framagit.org/peppercarrot/webcomics/-/issues/87Episode 28: The Festivities2019-01-24T19:36:52ZDavid Revoyinfo@davidrevoy.comEpisode 28: The FestivitiesHi!
![en_Pepper-and-Carrot_by-David-Revoy_E28_net](/uploads/3b4cc8ff71163d443774702751fa2624/en_Pepper-and-Carrot_by-David-Revoy_E28_net.jpg)
After a long time, here is episode 28, the second part of the trilogy of the Coronation of C...Hi!
![en_Pepper-and-Carrot_by-David-Revoy_E28_net](/uploads/3b4cc8ff71163d443774702751fa2624/en_Pepper-and-Carrot_by-David-Revoy_E28_net.jpg)
After a long time, here is episode 28, the second part of the trilogy of the Coronation of Coriander.
You can read a rendering here: https://www.peppercarrot.com/XYZ/index.php?subfolder=ep28-WIP_en
I'm not someone in real life used to be very active on party and I like the bench in the dark, outside, hearing the music and people having fun from distance. I probably spent myself a lot of time thinking this way during parties. That's a place I like and I hope the one who also like this moments will find that in this episode.
This second part is about how Pepper feels during the party after the Coronation. There is a lot of ingredients mixed here: jealous feelings for friends, not being in mood during a party and family in public event... I also wanted this episode to resolve the jealous relationship Pepper started to develop for Saffron after the magic contest.
The English will need serious improvements; and dialogs maybe more work to sound natural. (eg. I had no idea about how the Press sounds when asking question to Saffron ; or I had no idea how to sound a bit more 'narrator' during the first page). Thank you for your help, I hope you liked this second part.
### CHANGELOG
* **21 December 2018**: Initial commit https://framagit.org/peppercarrot/webcomics/commit/f973a8adaa4a60a3a8ed69ff338c6978dd47c0d0
### SCHEDULE
* **2 January 2019**: Beta, call for translations
* Release during the first week of 2019? ("when it's ready").https://framagit.org/peppercarrot/webcomics/-/issues/69Episode 27: Coriander's Invention2018-11-06T12:23:40ZDavid Revoyinfo@davidrevoy.comEpisode 27: Coriander's InventionHi!
Thank you for your patience. Here is episode 27, the first episode of a trilogy of episode about the Coronation of Coriander.
This first part happens before the ceremony. It introduces a bit more Coriander. We already saw her on pr...Hi!
Thank you for your patience. Here is episode 27, the first episode of a trilogy of episode about the Coronation of Coriander.
This first part happens before the ceremony. It introduces a bit more Coriander. We already saw her on previous episode, but never really understood she was a princess (except last panel in "[The Pyjama party](https://www.peppercarrot.com/en/article338/episode-13-the-pyjama-party)".) I never introduced her passion for robots too. This episode tries to (finally) solve that. We also see Qualicity for the first time. I hope you'll like it.
### CHANGELOG
* **12 October:** Initial commit. [→ Read alpha1](https://www.peppercarrot.com/XYZ/index.php?subfolder=ep27-WIP_en-alpha1)
* **13 October:** @martindisch first pass. [→ Read alpha2](https://www.peppercarrot.com/XYZ/index.php?subfolder=ep27-WIP_en-alpha1)
* **13 October:** @calimeroteknik 's SFX fix and @craigmaloney pass. [→ Read alpha3](https://www.peppercarrot.com/XYZ/index.php?subfolder=ep27-WIP_en-alpha3)
* **16 October:** Consensus on wording. New text for posters. New font for sound FX. [→ Read alpha4](https://www.peppercarrot.com/XYZ/index.php?subfolder=ep27-WIP_en-alpha4)
* **20 October:** @Midgard finished QA of details.
* **21 October:** @Deevad switched to beta. [→ Read beta](https://www.peppercarrot.com/XYZ/index.php?subfolder=ep27_WIP_en_beta)
* **31 October:** Released. [→ Read episode](https://www.peppercarrot.com/article451/episode-27-coriander-s-invention)
### SCHEDULE
This month is a bit special: my budget is in deep red and I need this episode online on 31 October... I'll try to take that as a challenge!
* **12 October:** [Alpha] Release of initial artworks + English folder).
* **21 October:** [Beta] Final proofread (English version).
* **21~31 October:** Translation period.
* **30 October:** Final artworks.
* **31 October:** Release day.
### MILESTONES
* %"Episode 27 string freeze"
* %"Episode 27 initial translations"
![en_Pepper-and-Carrot_by-David-Revoy_E27](/uploads/59bdc7e3aff5e2e14280fe5fcace98ba/en_Pepper-and-Carrot_by-David-Revoy_E27.jpg)2018-10-31https://framagit.org/peppercarrot/webcomics/-/issues/42Episode 26: Books Are Great: ready for translation2018-09-07T21:25:39ZDavid Revoyinfo@davidrevoy.comEpisode 26: Books Are Great: ready for translationThe Episode 26 of Pepper&Carrot: "Books Are Great" is now ready to translate before the release.
★ You can read a preview here (wip): https://www.peppercarrot.com/XYZ/index.php?subfolder=ep26-WIP_en
The release date is planned for th...The Episode 26 of Pepper&Carrot: "Books Are Great" is now ready to translate before the release.
★ You can read a preview here (wip): https://www.peppercarrot.com/XYZ/index.php?subfolder=ep26-WIP_en
The release date is planned for the end of July. Maybe the weekend of 28-29, maybe Monday 30. The last three pages still require a lot of work.
About the story; on previous episode 25, we ended on a panel where Pepper had to read stacks of books. A possible interpretation was that "books are boring"...
Episode 26 was created to do away with this faulty interpretation. That's how "Books Are Great" was born. This episode shows (without obviously telling) how Pepper is slowly growing and evolving. This episode also fills an undetermined period of time after the rebuild of the house. So, it will let me jump directly to a new arc (probably related to the exam of Pepper) on the next episode. I hope you'll like this episode with its mix of adventure/comedy.
If you have any difficulties ping me or ping the other contributors on our various chat channel (Telegram, Mattermost, IRC, Matrix., etc..., you'll find all links to this services on the "community" page of the official website).
Have a good week and thanks again for translating this episode before the release!
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> Hi,
> Here is the storyboard I've been working on:
> https://www.peppercarrot.com/XYZ/index.php?subfolder=ep26-WIP_en
> The sources are already on Framagit and it needs your feedback!
> ![2018-06-12_screenshot_173713_net](/uploads/7a6572cfa920b416fbfb776990dc9be8/2018-06-12_screenshot_173713_net.jpg)
https://framagit.org/peppercarrot/webcomics/-/issues/29Episode 25: Translation Ready2018-05-30T17:52:34ZDavid Revoyinfo@davidrevoy.comEpisode 25: Translation Ready[Comic with English text as one image](/uploads/7163dd0ab0e107d2da59ef56a249e0e5/en_Pepper-and-Carrot_by-David-Revoy_E25XXL.jpg)
You can also read it on XYZ here: https://www.peppercarrot.com/XYZ/index.php?subfolder=ep25-WIP_en
Hi, the...[Comic with English text as one image](/uploads/7163dd0ab0e107d2da59ef56a249e0e5/en_Pepper-and-Carrot_by-David-Revoy_E25XXL.jpg)
You can also read it on XYZ here: https://www.peppercarrot.com/XYZ/index.php?subfolder=ep25-WIP_en
Hi, the episode 25 of Pepper&Carrot "ep25_There-are-no-Shortcuts" was uploaded to the Git repo today at commit b4876382e8985d75b54e23d6ae9fce04e9b494df . It's a muted episode (as ep05, 10, 15, 20...). The render of the graphic posted today are a bit weak; the line of pencil are blurred, and colors just big splotch to catch the ambient (except for page 1 a bit sharper). All detail and "edges" to define volume and facial expression will comes within the next step; detailing. Release date planned: Wednesday 16 May. As usual, I'm also open to feedback for this beta version. :+1:
:warning: There is some small text on page 4 that has to be translated. On page 9 the question marks can be adjusted if necessary in your language.2018-05-16https://framagit.org/peppercarrot/webcomics/-/issues/3Episode 24: Translation Ready2018-06-09T15:46:25ZDavid Revoyinfo@davidrevoy.comEpisode 24: Translation ReadyHello translators of Pepper&Carrot,
Episode 24: The Unity Tree is ready for "translations before release" !
* You can read it here :
https://www.peppercarrot.com/XYZ/index.php?subfolder=ep24-WIP_en
* Git is here: https://framagit.org...Hello translators of Pepper&Carrot,
Episode 24: The Unity Tree is ready for "translations before release" !
* You can read it here :
https://www.peppercarrot.com/XYZ/index.php?subfolder=ep24-WIP_en
* Git is here: https://framagit.org/peppercarrot/webcomics
* Zip pack , here :
https://www.peppercarrot.com/XYZ/ep24-WIP_en/ep24_The-Unity-Tree_lang-pack.zip
Release date is planned on Friday 15 ; next week. Unfortunately, translation sent after release date will have to wait a bit; and be rendered and added online only around 28 December because I'll be in a trip during the holidays.
**Difficulties:**
This episode is a of course a "Special Xmas" episode but because Xmas doesn't exist in the world of Pepper&Carrot, we had to invent a parallel celebration. In English, they celebrate "The Unity" with a decorated "Unity Tree". Background story will be added later on our wiki to define more details about "The Unity". But if you want to read more about it and the creative process; feel free to dive into our [beta thread](https://framagit.org/peppercarrot/webcomics/issues/2).
The episode is still in speedpainting and I'll spend the next days to detail everything :D it will be intense.
Feel free to ask any questions here! I hope you'll like working on this episode.
*[edit: formating,typos]*2017-12-15https://framagit.org/peppercarrot/webcomics/-/issues/2Episode 24 beta2018-06-09T15:45:38ZDavid Revoyinfo@davidrevoy.comEpisode 24 betaHi!
Episode 24 codenamed *"The XXXX tree"* entered BETA step and is ready to receive feedback and enhancements. But the episode is **not ready to be translated** and also **don't reshared it online** as it is (artworks will needs anoth...Hi!
Episode 24 codenamed *"The XXXX tree"* entered BETA step and is ready to receive feedback and enhancements. But the episode is **not ready to be translated** and also **don't reshared it online** as it is (artworks will needs another 10 days of work to be "final"). Thank you. I propose you to directly read the beta episode to keep a fresh mind, then read the other part of this post :
![en_Pepper-and-Carrot_by-David-Revoy_E24XXL_beta](/uploads/7ac4e59f16859935a64ab4b3700272ea/en_Pepper-and-Carrot_by-David-Revoy_E24XXL_beta.jpg)
## How you can help:
Just write your feedback(s) on this thread. You can attach pictures, discuss and freely write your proposals. Together, I believe we can enhance this episode to something better, that's why I think this step is important. Here are the three main topics:
1. **Storytelling:** Read the beta version (at the end) and report your critics and proposals of enhancement.
2. **English dialogs** Propose better dialogs, more natural sentences and more correct English.
3. **Artworks** Your feedback about the drawings -even at this speedpainting beta step- are also welcome!
## Specific issue in this episode:
1. **Title:** I need a title! It will also allow me to get a folder name and commit the SVG to the webcomics/ repository.
2. **The XXXXXX Tree** is a placeholder name. I'm looking for a name audience could directly know they are speaking of a Xmas Tree without using "Xmas" (not part of the Pepper&Carrot world). I'm open to any type of brainstorming!
3. **Last catch phrase** : Pepper is worrying about her exam... Maybe something more funny?
4. **Micro-dimension** : Maybe a specific sound when entering and escaping it? Does it make you think about containerized apps? xD
## Schedule
Beta need to **end next week 8 December** to enter into translation-ready mode. It means english dialog, final title and all needs to be "frozen" before next week 8 December. Final release will be around 13/14 or 15 December.
Thanks for the help! I hope you'll like it2017-12-08