Commit 024a47bf authored by Nicolas Artance's avatar Nicolas Artance

Correct typo + no gender for the client until the end

parent b63c6d37
......@@ -11,7 +11,7 @@ In the crowd two little witches are talking.
_Pepper: Come on! Tell me who we are visiting!_
_Coriander: I said you'll see once we're there._
**Panel 2:** Focus inside the crowd. Pepper is trying to follow Coriander, who's carrying a big bag on her shoulders. Pepper has to carry Carrot in her arm, because there are a lot of people around. And also a lot of mechanical beings, that seem to try to help people. One of them is displaying a mini map of the city to a tourist. Carrot is very curious, and looks around him.
**Panel 2:** Focus inside the crowd. Pepper is trying to follow Coriander, who's carrying a big bag on her shoulders. Pepper has to carry Carrot in her arms, because there are a lot of people around. And also a lot of mechanical beings, that seem to try to help people. One of them is displaying a mini map of the city to a tourist. Carrot is very curious, and looks around him.
_Pepper: Why are you keeping this a secret? I am your friend, you can tell me!_
_Coriander: You heard my father: nobody can know anything about the identity of my client._
......@@ -85,7 +85,7 @@ _Coriander: It's over. Let's go on!_
**Panel 23:** They continue their walk. Pepper is grumpy, and Carrot, scared, looks carefully around him. The last bat of the previous panel landed on Pepper's hat, but nobody has seen it.
_Coriander: It is a trap for intruders. My client doesn't welcome visitors, except me._
_Pepper: Yes, that's why they attacked you too(!)_
_Pepper: Yes, that's why they attacked you too!_
_Coriander: My client doesn't have the technology to distinguish between the two. That's something I am working on. Ah, here we are._
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......@@ -111,19 +111,19 @@ _Coriander: Maybe you didn't expect all these obstacles to go see a simple clien
_Coriander: That's normal!._
**Panel 29:** Shift!
_Coriander: My client's life took an unexpected turn during his childhood._
_Coriander: My client's life took an unexpected turn during their childhood._
**Panel 30:** Looping!
_Coriander: He didn't know where to go!_
_Coriander: They didn't know where to go!_
**Panel 31:** The wagon stops.
_Coriander: If he couldn't find a house very quickly, my client's life would've stopped._
_Coriander: If they couldn't find a house very quickly, my client's life would've stopped._
**Panel 32:** The wagon is pushed upward by a platform.
_Coriander: Meeting my father was a springboard for my client!_
**Panel 33:** The wagon emerges from the floor.
_Coriander: He gave him a hidden house, with some traps so he's not disturbed._
_Coriander: He gave them a hidden house, with some traps so they are not disturbed._
**Panel 34:** Pepper and Carrot are confused. Judging by the grass on the floor, they must be in some sort of garden. Coriander turns off her lamp and shows something with her hand.
_Coriander: This is it! This is my client's house._
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